Your writing has improved, and my reading skills. XD Once again, many big words (which I really didn't think was bad ) but this time I was able to get the meaning of all of them without a dictionary. Perhaps we do learn something at school..

But anyway, I'm rambling. I like the poem, especially the images it calls to mind. (Ik bedoel hier iets mee waarvan ik het woord kwijt ben (gebeurt wel vaker XD), zeg maar dat het erg 'beschrijvend' is, op een goede manier. Zeg maar dat je iets zegt en dat het meteen beelden in je oproept.. meh, misschien kom ik later nog op het woord. )

The only thing I didn't like very much (but that might just be personal preference) is the use of mine and thine, but then again, I can understand why you went for those words and not the regular me and you.

So, overall, great job! Keep up the good work, I'd love to see more of your supposedly 'bad writing'. ^-~



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All the sorrow and the pain
will be washed away by rain
- Stratovarius, Season of Change

its like i dont know the words but to know exectly what you are talking about... wierd shizzle i know but its an awsome piece of writing

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As a vampire drinks my blood,
As a wearwolf staring at me.
You are just one of them,
Another fantasy!


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Thanks a lot for the comment!

My writing hasn't improved. >_> It's still as bad as ever. Yeah, I seem to like them fancy words. School has taught you well, my friend.

You're not rambling, and even if you are, it's a good thing! Unless one rambles like myself, of course. I don't know the word you're after, but I get your meaning. ^_~

'Mine' and 'thine' gave the poem a more archaic feel, which I always encourage people to do, hence why I chose those over 'my' and 'your/thy'.

You'll certainly see more of it soon enough. Thanks again. ^_^

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While I'm staring at the roses, the melody of death flows

Thanks a lot for the comment and the fav! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it, and understanding it, although you don't really grasped the meaning of all words I used.

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While I'm staring at the roses, the melody of death flows

I thought you were using mine/thine because it was more fitting for the images inspired by the band, but oh well. ^-~ I personally wouldn't recommend people to use it, because most of the time people use them in the wrong way.. XD

'neway, I'm already looking forward to more, so get writing! ^__^

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All the sorrow and the pain
will be washed away by rain
- Stratovarius, Season of Change

Er, yeah, of course, that would be my second reason! ^_^;

I need inspiration first, though!

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While I'm staring at the roses, the melody of death flows

well i understand what its about and i can see the big lines soo its awsum

--
As a vampire drinks my blood,
As a wearwolf staring at me.
You are just one of them,
Another fantasy!


Take a look at my [link]

That's exactly what I meant~

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While I'm staring at the roses, the melody of death flows

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As a vampire drinks my blood,
As a wearwolf staring at me.
You are just one of them,
Another fantasy!


Take a look at my [link]